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Post by Deleted on Sept 30, 2013 23:27:01 GMT -5
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Post by asylum on Oct 2, 2013 10:27:00 GMT -5
I thought this was really good right up to the last paragraph. I think the concept of the last paragraph is something you visualize and say that would be awesome, but I think it belongs to a different roleplay entirely. For me it took away from the rest of your work. That's just my opinion and it's really a very strong rp still.
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